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Good paragraph development is a mark of a writer's investment in a topic. With the main idea established, the writer then explores the significance of that topic through one or more methods of development—reflection, explanation, exemplification, definition, etc.—taking a general concept and making it real. General statements, like "Volleyball is a great sport," "Instant messaging should be disabled when kids are doing their homework," or "Mediterranean cooking is healthy," become concrete and specific in the well-developed paragraph. The reader learns why the writer believes in an idea. In this module, students will learn techniques of good paragraph development, such as determining when and where more development is needed, and when to add more evidence versus greater depth of explanation or detail.
What does a well-developed paragraph look like?
A well-developed paragraph is a complete paragraph. It has a controlling idea, whether that idea is declared in a topic sentence in the beginning, middle, or end of the paragraph, or whether the idea is implied. Everything else in the paragraph is there to show the reader the validity and significance of that idea. Sounds kind of like a thesis and essay right? In many ways, the paragraph is like a mini-essay—like the essay, paragraphs are generally idea-driven and so need support if a reader is to go along with the author. The burden of proof is on the author. The reader, after reading the writer's idea, says, "Ok, show me." The author must provide enough effective development to have a reader say "I'm with you," or even better, "Wow! I hadn't thought about that before, but that's true."
To see the difference good development makes, just take a look at these example paragraphs, one well-developed and the other not so well-developed:
The thoughtful detail in the first paragraph shows a much more engaged writer than the writer of the second paragraph. A seemingly empty topic, parking lots, is made interesting by details like "[a parking lot] is a place where you drive your car in and drop it off for a stay while you go about your business; similar to the way a cowboy in the old west would tether his horse outside the saloon." The author, Rich Motherwell, helps readers re-see a familiar space in passages like this one where he gets readers to realize that we have always needed parking, even before people had cars! The author of the second paragraph, on the other hand, stays at the surface of the topic, providing cliché generalizations about what the tourist will find to do in Chinatown, San Francisco. As a result, readers are only reminded of what they already know; they learn nothing new, receive no insight, and no sense of a writer's mind and voice behind the words.
A well-developed paragraph has a clear controlling idea, and detail that brings that idea to life. A well-developed paragraph also reflects the mind of the author who is engaged by the topic and who is concerned with communicating his or her own unique way of seeing to the reader.
How much development is enough?
How does a writer know when development is complete? A writer's decision about completeness will depend on the audience and on the controlling idea for the paragraph. In making decisions about development, a good writer asks, "How much does my audience know about this topic?" "Am I introducing new terms that will be unfamiliar to my audience? The audience will need to have unfamiliar terms defined and new concepts explained in enough detail so that the concepts become clear. And so, two paragraphs with identical arguments can have radically different development plans if the audiences are different: A paragraph discussing the ways massage therapy can help a person recover from muscle injuries will have one kind of development for patients, and another for massage therapy professionals.
In addition, the controlling idea determines how much development is needed and how long the paragraph is going to be. Some ideas are complex and will need extensive explanation and/or exemplification; for example, the controlling idea "Democracy is the foundation of a good community" will need extensive explanation and exemplification to be a convincing point. But other ideas can be developed in a sentence or two, as in this example, "A Pie chart help us see where company money is going"; a quick break-down of the chart to explain distribution of funds is all that is really needed here. Some paragraphs are composed of only a single sentence, while some paragraphs are up to a page long. An essay does not separate into uniform packages of evidence, but instead is composed of a variety of paragraphs at different levels of development. Consider the following series of two paragraphs, one fairly short, and one a bit longer, from an essay on television heroes from the early 1950s.
The first paragraph narrates a moment in time; it sets up a "once" to help the reader experience the mood of an era: a feeling of awe that television viewers had in the face of television technology and culture. The second paragraph characterizes that culture in much greater detail. The writer provides extensive examples to show exactly what "a great deal of television" means.
When trying to decide on length. Try and think like your reader. Ask yourself if a reader would benefit from hearing more about a particular point, or if there is already enough information to make the controlling idea seem valid and interesting. Examine every sentence to see if it might deserve further explanation or exemplification.
General to Specific & Abstract to Concrete Development...
A useful way to think about developing paragraphs is to think about levels of detail. A paragraph should include sentences at varying levels—the topic sentence or controlling idea being the most general or abstract, and supporting sentences having more specific and/or concrete development. S. I. Hayakawa, in his influential book Language in Thought and Action, talks about a "ladder of abstraction" as a tool for thinking about good communication. As Hayakawa points out, we need both abstract and concrete language for communication. Without abstractions and generalizations, we would have a hard time sharing ideas: for example, each of us has our own image of "dog" in our minds, one person may think of her Chihuahua, Bandit; another of his family's German Shepherd, Brutus; another individual may associate all dogs with the vicious Dachsund that bit his ankle. And so, we need the word "dog" in order to communicate and to find common ground, even if the word causes the particularities of Bandit, Brutus, and the biting Dachsund to drop away. With the word "dog," we can talk about dogs as companions, dogs as pack animals, dogs as descendents of wolves, etc., and we can agree on what dogs are generally like. On the other hand, if we stay at a general level, without ever getting specific or concrete, we risk leaving our communications wide open for interpretation. For example, a politican might (quite intentionally) say "If elected, I will increase health care benefits for seniors." Health care benefits is a phrase at a fairly high level of abstraction: it can refer to anything from coverage of hospital expenses, to coverage of prescription drugs, to co-pay expenses. Who knows what the politician is really thinking of in terms of concrete actions? Perhaps the candidate intends to increase Medi-care coverage for prescription drugs, or make emergency care free to everyone over 65; in the abstract statement, what the candidate is thinking is anyone's guess. The politician relies on such abstract statements, and an unquestioning public, to win elections. In a written text, however, a reader will rarely accept a series of generalizations as text worth reading; a reader expects to get concrete information and a new perspective or new insight, and to hear a person's unique voice; and this voice comes out in the details rather than in the broad generalization.
In an abstract statement, as Hayakawa points out, words should be "referable" to lower levels of abstraction. A good paragraph goes down the ladder of abstraction to provide these references. The figure to the right demonstrates how one might go down the ladder of abstraction and provide such references in a discussion of music.
Now, take a look at a paragraph that goes down through all of the levels of abstraction above:
To write well-developed paragraphs, think in terms of levels of detail. Students sometimes have the mistaken idea that to develop a paragraph they just need to keep adding more examples when what they really need is to take an existing idea to greater depth.
Original Ladder image courtesy of Luciano Tirabassi, stockxchng.com
1. What does a well-developed paragraph look like?
2. How much development is enough?
3. Abstract to concrete & general to specific